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it trembles, a
crooked form caught
in a black sea,
its surface
stagnant now – the
still waters rumble
with the passing of cars and
unmoving eyes, casting deep
shadows over its
small
broken body

alone and
weary

it croaks, a feathery wing outstretched,
reaching
a mouth, wide open

unable to utter a single
cry

First time writing poetry in a little over a year.
It's been awhile.


I plan to make this visual later on, but yah.

EDIT: So apparently this hit front page, on Popular - 8 hours. (I was wondering where all these favs were coming from, haha.) Thank you for the support, guys~

Also, sorry for making this rather depressing, haha..

EDIT 2: Front page 24 hours? Holy. @_@
EDIT 3: Front page 3 days;aldkfjksdlf.
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Starblazingdragon Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013  Hobbyist
WARNING! Carry on reading! Or you will die, even if you only looked at the word warning!
Once there was a little girl called Clarissa, she was ten-years-old and she lived in a mental
hospital, because she killed her mom and her dad. She got so bad she went to kill all the
staff in the hospital so the More-government decided that best idea was to get rid of her so
they set up a special room to kill her, as humane as possible but it went wrong the
machine they were using went wrong. And she sat there in agony for hours until she died.
Now every week on the day of her death she returns to the person that reads this letter, on
a Monday night at 12:00 a.m. She creeps into your room and kills you slowly, by cutting you
and watching you bleed to death. Now send this to ten other pictures on this one site, and
she will haunt someone else who doesn't. This isn't fake. apparently, if you copy and paste
this to ten comments in the next ten minutes you will have the best day of your life tomorrow.You
will either get kissed or asked out, if you break this chain u will see a little dead girl in youReply
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OragamiThoughts Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Love the imagery
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puzzledpixel Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i love the image and the imagery. we salute yoo.
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Nokhsa Featured By Owner May 15, 2012
This is an incredible idea; I would have loved to write about this! (don't worry, though, i won't knowing you have)

You've executed it very nicely, on top of that. Extremely powerful and quiet. Very nice. Better than most any of the other stuff I've read here, and I've read a lot of new works and popular works.
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DragonsDwelling Featured By Owner May 15, 2012
Hehe, well, you could always approach the same theme another way. x)
But anyway, thank you!
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Nokhsa Featured By Owner May 15, 2012
I also wanted to add how I love that this could definitely take place in reality, including all the details.
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randomise42 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful!!! :hug: Thats amazing and so tragic, you've written it so well :heart:
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DragonsDwelling Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2011
Thank you. (:
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xxSilverEchoxx Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Is the picture yours? Either way, can you send me a link to it if you have one, please? :) And love the poem, by the way.
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DragonsDwelling Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2011
Actually, yes. A doodle, but mine all the same, haha.
I don't really have a link to it apart from the one here though... may I ask what you need it for? I'm just curious. xD

And thank you~
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